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happy_never_after ([personal profile] happy_never_after) wrote2007-10-28 04:51 pm
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Love is Blind Chapter 28

Ennis hated drivin' by, but had ta be done. Linden pointed out it wouldn't be smart to park the truck in front of the body shop and told him the used car lot across the street was perfect. They all agree that lot was the best place.

Ennis crossed the street with his hands in his pockets, grinnin' at Benito. The old guy looked great. Seeing him made Ennis feel like a kid. Benito mussed his hair, kissed his cheek, and made Ennis blush to his toes as the old vet clasped Ennis to his chest. Jack came up behind joinin' in for a three-way hug, and it felt damn good. Benito held a big piece of Ennis' heart, and Ennis swore he'd never take a loved one fer granted ever again. He'd make damn sure the vet was in his life until one of 'em stopped breathin'.

Ennis' gaze rested on the man with the oh-so-familiar face. That strong square chin, bright white smile and warm dark eyes that were shaped with the wisdom of Sister Sarita.


Ennis slapped his hand into Jorge's, givin' two strong shakes. "Nice ta finally meet ya," Ennis said. "I reckon you're Jorge."

"You're right there. And you're Ennis. And this is Jack." Jorge looked over at Linden. "And who's this?"

Jack and Ennis parted, and there Linden stood between them, shufflin' his feet and noddin' in Ennis' direction. Them damned eyes drooped wide and bashful like some shy puppy's. Ennis hated that Linden was flustered around him, but hated it more that Linden flustered him. And all that arguin'-- damned if Ennis understood why he kept pickin' at Linden.

Ennis observed Jorge's careful assessment and then Sarita's brother saw Nina and a big-toothed grin sprang to his face-- Ennis laughed. Frantic ta scratch an itch, Nina used Jack's leg like some scratchin' post, rubbin' her right side up, down and around. Jack wasn't minding at all-- he even helped her by leanin' in.

Ennis' heart skipped. Jack smiled so easy, could drink in that man forever, way he swaggered all sure and easy. 

"This here is private eye Wesley Linden," Jack spoke, noddin' to Linden. "This here is Benito and Jorge."

Jorge's dark eyes focused on the private detective, movin' over Linden's face, chest, arms like he was inspectin' a paint job on a car. Eye fixed on the sleeve of Linden's blood-soaked shirt. Linden fidgeted like he had the habit of doin', then the PI flashed Jorge one of them gap-toothed grins and shook Jorge's hand with his good arm. Turned to Benito and did the same.

Way Linden's lips tightened, Ennis reckoned his arm pained him something fierce. Benito noticed too and brushed Linden's shoulder, then he spoke, concern in his voice, "Think we should go inside and have a look at your arm, son."

"Sure thing," Linden whispered as he stepped forward.

Ennis took Jack's hand, steps equal like their minds was together; Ennis found that he barely needed to guide Jack through the auto graveyard. Nina scampered in and out of the cars without a care.

Jorge unlocked the padlock on the chained door.

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Linden liked Benito right off. He had a bounce and zest to him. He sparked right up watching Nina and then the way he'd hugged Ennis made Linden all warm and mushy like watching Ward and the Beaver. He was glad introductions were fast though-- the bullet set off bright sparks of pain with each slight movement and throbbed even when he was still. He didn't mean to be such a wuss when it came to pain, but he'd always been this way, even as a kid with just a scraped knee. He was never good at ignoring his ailments or anxieties.

Everything after that was pretty much a blur as Jorge opened the door, and Benito hustled him into the garage. His eyes adjusted after a moment. The garage was dark, but enough light filtered in from the front windows to see. But instead Linden watched his feet as he walked, a bad habit he still carried from childhood. He shook his foot, but no luck getting' it off-- wadded-up masking tape stuck to his shoe-- the stuff was everywhere in strips and balls on the floor. Jorge bent down and ripped it off for him. Linden blinked; his eyes fixed big in fascination. What is wrong with me? he thought. First ogling Ennis' ass, now this guy's.

I need to get laid.

Jorge flipped on the lights, and Linden's trance broke.

He looked up and away, wishing he hadn't-- at least Jorge's ass was stimulating and kept his mind off the abomination that was this place. Memories of auto shop plagued him, and this place was like the old nightmare. Paint covered everything-- testing nozzles filled with metallic colors. Smell of spray paint and grease. Every surface, layer upon layer covered, forming surreal blotches. Then there was a huge floor-to-ceiling fan sucking air out of the building-- huge blades whirling-- like out of some bad sci-fi movie. The only things in its place were the tools, and mallets, screw drivers, ratchets, and wrenches: big wrenches, little wrenches, and a three foot monster wrench.

Linden stripped to his t-shirt and waited for some smart-ass comment about his physique and was nonplussed when none came. He checked out the less than sanitary conditions. At least Benito washed his hands in the sink, even though it was coated with congealed paint and Bondo. And he did use soap even if it was that crap sandpaper soap called Lava.

Benito looked at the wound, pressing around the edges with his finger.

"I'm going to give you a local anesthetic to numb it before I go digging around to get it out," the doc said. "It looks pretty clean to me. I'll give you an antibiotic to ward off possible infection. You'll need to change the bandage for the first day or so."

Linden nodded as he watched the doc turn to get what he needed out of his bag. Big Black Bag. Just like those old-time doctors on TV. He lined the instruments out just like soldiers. First Benito took the scissors and carefully cut away Linden's shirt. Linden held his breath and remained very, very still.

As Benito swabbed gently around the wound, Linden worried that the body shop wasn't sterile.

He didn't look as Benito stuck the needle in his arm because he worried that he'd start crying like a baby.

He felt a pinch. Then another, then another. That wasn't that bad, but he still couldn't stop obsessing on the grease and dirt that coated every last crack and groove of the shop. What if he contracted some rare infection?

Benito finished swabbing, and Linden had no inclination to look when the doc asked, "Do you feel this?"

"Yes," he squeaked back. Damn, he thought. Look at Ennis. He thinks I'm a chicken. Act tough.

"This?"

"No." 

Fuck, he thought, I shouldn't have lied. Now he's going to cut into me.

"Maybe we should wait a few more minutes-- to make perfectly sure," Benito suggested.

He liked that vet more and more with every minute--

Linden waited. Benito prepared.

No, no-- the scalpel and tongs won't feel like a hook and ladder. No, no--

Then he looked. Dark dreamy eyes.

Not Ennis. Not Ennis.

Jorge. Darker dreamy eyes. Yeah. Wait-- no-- don't look. Straight man! Straight man! Look down, no-- look up-no look down-- ah, fuck. Big muscle… I mean muscles. Not good-stop it. Don't look at the ass-- don't look at the ass. Oh god, he noticed, he noticed me checking his ass.

"I got it. It's out."

"What?"

"The bullet," Benito said. "Now I'll suture and bandage you right up then you boys can get to your hideout. I hate holding you here too long."

Linden kept his eyes on Benito. He decided that was the safest option. His arm didn't hurt, but his pride did. The old guy had Linden sewn up and bandaged lickity-split and handed him some pain killers and antibiotics.

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Ennis liked the place the doc found for them in Zapata County. House was nothin’ fancy-- a slab home on a lonesome road with no neighbors. House had only a couple of rooms. Wide open kitchen and livin’ area all in one with rafters openin' up to the loft above where the one bedroom was. Was out in nowhere land, where the sun set on big sky. Linden didn't appreciate the view none. First thing he asked was about comfort, how many beds, was there a TV or one of them new-fangled microwaves. That was the problem with them city folk-- too many comforts. Ennis was happy with a campfire and a sleeping bag. And if he was really desperate for entertainment, a harmonica played by Jack Twist. Wasn’t long ago he’d a done anything ta hear him play.

“Guess I’m taking the sofa,” Linden said, givin’ Ennis then Jack a quick look as they both sat down on it. “For the night, I mean. And I sure hope voices don't carry.”

Jack bit back a laugh. “Well don’t go strainin' yer ears-- never know what ya might hear.”

“Jack, will ya stop?” All Ennis needed was fer Jack ta be encouragin' him. Damn.

Linden was doin' his usual investigation of the premises. "Looks like your friends stocked it with food," he said, openin' the fridge then checkin' out the cupboards. "Don't know about you two, but I'm starved. Either of you two like to cook?"

"Well, Ennis here ain't bad at warmin' up beans," Jack laughed.

"Jack ain't much better. He does fine with breakfast on a campfire though."

"I guess you two won't mind if I cook then," Linden said, perkin' up. "Looks like I could make spaghetti pretty fast. You like spaghetti?"

"Sounds good," Jack said, and Ennis nodded, agreein'. 

Pots and pans banged. 

"Need help?" Jack asked. "With yer arm that way, might be good ta have a hand." Ennis frowned as Jack poked him, coaxin' him ta help Linden.

"I guess," Linden said, lookin' at Ennis all unsure.

"I'll help." Ennis got up slow off the couch and wandered next to Linden.

"I'll need a large pot for the pasta, a small frying pan and a good-sized pot for the sauce. And a colander too." 

Ennis nodded, and dug through the pans, findin' what Linden needed.

"A cookie sheet for the garlic bread would be nice too."

Ennis set all the pots and pans out for Linden while the PI got what he needed out of the fridge and cupboards.

Ennis filled the pan with water and turned on the stove, gettin' a grin from Linden.

"Thanks," he said. "I think I can handle the rest from here."

"I don't mind helpin'. Know yer arm ain't painin' ya none right now, but I imagine gettin' shot takes it outta of ya."

"I imagine."

"Sure you're fine?" Ennis asked.

"I'm dandy," Linden said. "You could cut up the mushrooms."

Ennis nodded. Could do that. 

Linden had the sauce started while he got the bread ready. 

"I liked the vet friend of yours, Benito. You're fortunate-- friends like him are pretty rare." 

Ennis looked over in Jack's direction. Alls he saw was the back of his head along with the back of the old couch. "I think so too," Ennis said, scrappin' the mushrooms into the fryin' pan with the back of the knife.

"Can't say as I've had many close friends," Linden said. "Karen's about the closest I have to a best friend out here. Never had many good friends out east."

"Never had many good friends myself," Ennis admitted, watchin' Linden sauté the mushrooms. "But I always had Jack. He's been my best friend fer twenty years." Ennis looked over at his best friend, his lover. Jack turned his head and smiled at Ennis. Was amazin'. Must a felt Ennis watchin' him-- or nosy bastard was listenin'. Sometimes the way Jack felt  and heard things it was almost spooky. Him and those super sensitive ears. Damn he loved that nosy bastard. 

Reckoned Nina was either sprawled on the couch next to him or on the floor near his feet 'cause she weren't nowhere in sight. 

"That's what Jack told me." Linden stirred the sauce. "Twenty years is a long time."

Both stood next ta each other by the stove as Linden worked. Ennis shifted his weight from one leg to the other.

"Guess you can sit down with Jack-- thanks for the help."

Ennis nodded, then wandered out to Jack. Moved Nina over and got cozy next ta him. First time in days Ennis felt safe. Jack kissed his head and reached around him, pullin' him closer. Ennis felt the inevitable stirrin below. Jack put his hand there and squeezed. Ennis didn't push him away. He was glad the couch was facin' the other way. Leaned over and whispered in Jack's ear, "Later, Rodeo I'll give ya all this. Ya like that?"

Jack groaned quietly back in his ear. "I sure would, Cowboy." Jack rubbed his cock harder. "Like makin' out on the couch with the parents in the other room," Jack whispered, toyin' with Ennis' zipper. 

"Ah, yeah, but don't want ta git caught."

"That's what makes it so excitin'," Jack murmured. He took his hand away from the zipper, graspin' Ennis hard through his jeans instead. 

"I ain't gonna be able ta stand up ta eat if you don't stop," Ennis moaned.

Jack laughed softly and took his hand away. He rested his head on Ennis' shoulder until it was time to eat.

Dinner was good. Linden made for a good cook. Ennis had ta admit it was a hell of a lot better than Chef Boyardee. Had two helpings. Noticed Linden lookin' at them both strange, like he knew what he and Jack was up to on the couch. Didn't do much talkin', just feedin' their faces. Jack offered ta help with the dishes, so Ennis told Linden they'd handle them and fer him to settle down and rest. 

Linden found some blankets and a pillow. After finishin' the dishes, they found Linden asleep on the couch with Nina curled up at his feet. Jack gave Ennis a wicked little smile, and they was off ta check the accommodations.

Jack had no problem climbin' the ladder to the loft. 

"If we're gonna do this with him in the other room we gotta fuck like mice," Ennis whispered, behind em.

"But their dicks are little." Jack took Ennis' arm.

 "I mean quiet like a mouse." They walked over to the bed. Was a small bedroom, but neat.

"Oh," Jack whispered, pullin' the quilt on the bed back. "I got ya. I was just kiddin'. Why you all serious?"

"Cause I'm always serious when I'm about ta fuck you silly," he said as he stripped off his jeans.

"Now yer makin' jokes."

Jack flung his clothes off and climbed under the covers, and Ennis followed. Jack planted a hot wet kiss on Ennis' mouth.

"Sh-h-h-h!" Ennis hissed.

"What? You think he's Superman?" Jack whispered. "Queer superhero hears homos suckin' face from forty feet."

"Shut up and suck my dick."

"Love ta."

Jack did. Kissed a trail all the way there. Made special lip-smackin' sounds just ta piss Ennis off, too.

"Think he can hear that?" Jack asked.

"He ain't gonna hear nothin' if you wrap that mouth around where it should be, friend."

Ennis groaned into his pillow as Jack did exactly what Ennis suggested.

Make him come so hard, he screamed into the pillow.

Now was Jack's turn.

Ennis took Jack down his throat. Never tasted anything like Jack Twist after a spaghetti dinner. Ennis reckoned it must have been that garlic toast.

He kept havin' ta whisper, "Shut up, Jack." Finally stopped and threw the damn pillow at him. Had ta stop and look at the man. Was all flushed. Loved that look of desperation in Jack's face. 

"What?" Jack asked.

"Told ya ta be quiet like a mouse. If ya don't listen ta me, I ain't gonna let you come."

"I'll stuff the pillow in my mouth, just fuckin' do it."

Ennis went back down on him. Jack kicked and squirmed. Never had ta wonder if he was doin' right by him during love-makin'. Man was always so demonstrative. Could tell he was about to shoot because his legs got taunt and still like when yer gettin' ready ta pull the trigger. Then he went off-- thrashed around on the bed like holy hell. Loved that Jack Twist--

Best dessert he ever had.

TBC

[identity profile] sweetje.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 09:07 am (UTC)(link)
That greeting Benito gave Ennis was so sweet. It's nice to see that he can show his affection for Ennis in that way.

So Linden has the eye for Jorge, eh. I wonder if anything will come of that.

I hope Linden didn't wake up and hear Jack and Ennis in the throes of passion. Poor guy is getting tortured enough as it is.

I love to see Jack and Ennis together. The way they interact with each other is very special and heartwarming.

I'm really looking forward to your next chapter. : )
Debra

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 10:35 pm (UTC)(link)
Benito deserved big hugs from Ennis for all the support he's given him. And I do love writing the sweet times between Jack and Ennis more than writing sex or humor. Just being easy with each other.

Thanks, Debra.

el

[identity profile] suzysue2.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 11:49 am (UTC)(link)
Whew! I'm glad they are all safe again - at least, for the moment. Benito is a good friend and perhaps Jorge will be a 'good friend' for Linden? lol

Great story; I'm looking forward to the next instalment.

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 10:37 pm (UTC)(link)
Well, safe for the time being. And on 'Jorge' being a good frined to Linden-- time will tell.

Thanks for reading. Hope to keep update on this schedule.

el

[identity profile] diva52.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 12:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Good to see them being relaxed with each other after all the hoopla of late.
One thing, when Linden first goes into the body shop to be seen to he 'strips off his shirt'. A little later Benito cuts away his shirt. Have I missed something here?
Andy

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 05:25 pm (UTC)(link)
ack! I meant down to t-shirt. I'll have to fix that. Thanks for noticing. Sometimes when I shift words around words get left out of the translation (and other times I just plain goof).

el

[identity profile] sam-cdn.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 02:00 pm (UTC)(link)
Aw, I like them all relaxed and comfy at the cabin ... but I have a feeling that isn't going to last very long. Are we going to see Jorge again soon? I'm interested in him ... and in Linden's interest in him. And J and E trying to have quiet sex--adorable!
Can't wait for more.
-Sam

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 10:39 pm (UTC)(link)
Thaks so much. Mm, yes, Jorge will make an appearance soon. Linden needs another distraction to go along with Ennis.

thanks, Sam.

el

[identity profile] mariez65.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 02:49 pm (UTC)(link)
Yay! They're safe - for the time being..... God, could I love Benito more? His relationship with Ennis is a beautiful thing - for Ennis to let himself feel such a connection to another man - aside from Jack and in a totally different way - says so much about the progress that he's made.

Too many LOL lines to pick just one, but Linden's thoughts while having the bullet removed were priceless: ....Straight man! Straight man! Look down, no-- look up-no look down-- ah, fuck. Big muscle… I mean muscles. Not good-stop it. Don't look at the ass-- don't look at the ass... and so was J&E's conversation in the loft!

So, that was fun! Why do I have the feeling things will take a turn .....
Great chapter, as always, el. Thanks!

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:19 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks, Marie-- I love having Benito back in the story. The father and son relationship is something both the boys lacked and Benito is a man who was plenty of heart to share.

Poor Linden, he always gets caught checking out tushes. Fellow can't help it, I guess.

Thanks for reading and commenting. el

[identity profile] samtyr.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 04:07 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm glad that they are safe for now. I hope that Jorge can be trusted though because the bad guys have been just a little too lucky in finding them.

I'm really looking forward to the next chapter. Thank you for sharing this.

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:21 am (UTC)(link)
Yes, a little too luck-- but they are safe, as you say, for now. Thanks for reading!

el

LOve is Blind 28

[identity profile] cwby30.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 04:36 pm (UTC)(link)
Mornin'.

Well, glad to see the guys are safe for the time being. Somewhat concerned about how remote the house is. No nosy neighbors, but then again hard to get help if/when necessary.

LOL with Linden and Jorge. Is he or isn't he? Another story line? Also with Linden concerned about cleanliness in the shop, and his visions of high school shop class.

Also, glad the guys had some quiet (!) time together. They needed that after all the tension. Wonder if Linden heard them, and if so.... !

The calm before the coming storm.

Thanks again.

Re: LOve is Blind 28

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:24 am (UTC)(link)
Hey, to you.

The house is far away. They'll need to rely on each other instead of outside help.

On is Jorge or isn't Jorge, I'll won't answer for time being (or if poor old Linden had to suffer listening to the boys getting busy).

Feds are up next and finding a solution to the mess.

Thanks for reading and looking beneath the story.

el

[identity profile] bbmjack324.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 09:31 pm (UTC)(link)
Funny line: "But their dicks are little." Jack took Ennis' arm.

Love insatiable and wild Jack that fits with his big sweet and bubbly personality. This description was luscious: Jack kicked and squirmed. Never had ta wonder if he was doin' right by him during love-makin'. Man was always so demonstrative. Could tell he was about to shoot because his legs got taunt and still like when yer gettin' ready ta pull the trigger. Then he went off-- thrashed around on the bed like holy hell. Loved that Jack Twist--

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:26 am (UTC)(link)
One thing I've noticed recently is that mice aren't always quiet. Ennis tried his best to keep Jack from waking Linden. But, not so sure he succeeded.

Thanks for reading. el

[identity profile] trekfan.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 10:04 pm (UTC)(link)
mmmm mmmm all this talk of food is making me hungry.

I like what Jack and Ennis came up with for dessert.

I just wonder how ASLEEP Linden is. He could be listening in on their lovemaking and getting awfully jealous

20 years, yep and more good years to come too!

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:30 am (UTC)(link)
Spaghetti. Yum. But it's the dessert I like thinking about the best.

Poor Linden. Missing out on dessert. :(

thanks for following the story and commenting.

el

[identity profile] tmn1966.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 10:10 pm (UTC)(link)
So glad to see another update. So loving this story!

Thank you!

Teri

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:31 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks, Teri. I appreciate the feedback!

el

[identity profile] tndmbk42.livejournal.com 2007-10-29 10:45 pm (UTC)(link)

That was great, el. Will never be able to look at garlic toast again without thinking of this particular chapter! LOL. Like it that Ennis is starting to value friendships and not take them for granted. Through his rough experience of almost losing Jack, it's making him grow as a person for sure. Have the feeling this is the calm before the next storm....!

Kathy

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:35 am (UTC)(link)
Sorry to spoil garlic toast for you (or do you like the thought? Hmm).

Ennis never had a close relationship other than with Jack. Losing his only real friend you have is hard to fathom. Imagine how lost and alone he must have felt. It's good to have Jack back, but also to grow and let himself experience friendship is healing also.

thanks so much for reading. Love your thought, Kathy!

el

sweet temptations

[identity profile] joetheone.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 01:35 am (UTC)(link)
HMM the best kind of dessert for sure. And low calorie as well. OK I'm glad that Jorge looked at Linden and the nice simple dinner was good as well. I do feel bad for Linden being so horny and knowing these two are all over each other but well that is life. I am also happy to know this was just a a good chapter no bad things. Joe

Re: sweet temptations

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:39 am (UTC)(link)
You're hysterical! Low cal! Yeah, Jorge may think of Linden as his next meal (and Linden needs some kind of outlet). But also Linden is a lot like Ennis-- he's closed himself off from friendship and intimacy. Now he's seeing the real deal between two men and he know what he's missing.

Thanks Joe for commenting.

[identity profile] ifyoucantfixit2.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 03:02 am (UTC)(link)



Loved this chapter with all the interplay between the characters.
Like the joking and teasing.. And I always particular like the inside
the head, talk..Its always priceless...great job...janice

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:42 am (UTC)(link)
It's fun getting into Ennis' head. I find Jack is easier to write (Linden too)-- but Ennis. He's a challenge. He holds back so much of the time, gotta wonder what went on in his head and how often he thought of words he couldn't bring himself to say to Jack or anyone.

thanks for reading the story.

el

[identity profile] lalaynia.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 03:24 am (UTC)(link)
Still reading, still loving this.

Poor Linden, shot, horny, and alone on the couch, listening.
Oh, come on, you KNOW Jack and Ennis can't be that quiet. ;D

Thanks!
-Joan

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:44 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks, Joan. Yes, they couldn't have been that quiet or the painkillers that strong. Since he already alluded to hearing them, he probably was looking forward to it so don't feel too sorry for the horny little guy.

Thanks back at you! el

[identity profile] bbmbeliever.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 03:58 am (UTC)(link)
Poor Linden, you know he heard them. and he's so horny. maybe Jorge will take him up on it...

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:45 am (UTC)(link)
Maybe Jorge will give Linden a "hand."

Thanks for the feedback!

el

[identity profile] fridayblues.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 04:14 am (UTC)(link)
Benito is a sweet man. I love the way he greeted Ennis, too:) I like it when Ennis took Jack's hand, like it when Ennis told Linden about Jack and him while they were cooking. Nina is comfortable with Linden now so I'm pretty sure he passed the test to be out boys's friend.
I always looking forward to your update.
Thanks :)
xxx

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:50 am (UTC)(link)
You picked up on the subtle exchanges between Jack and Ennis. Thanks. I try to make sure that they share those little intimacies that make relationships rich. It's a step forward for Ennis to talk about how he feels for Jack-- especially with someone who he feel a tad uncomfortable with. It's a step closer to admitting what he is.

thanks for reading and look forward to Flea too!

[identity profile] rt-in-town.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 06:21 am (UTC)(link)
Mmmm, love your description of Jack's desperation and need, his kicking and squirming when being pleasured. I can just imagine him trying to suppress his squeals and biting into the pillow, bucking wildly and helplessly while Ennis gets him off - very hot!

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:52 am (UTC)(link)
I love that image too (both Jack excited and Ennis gettin him off). Thinking of it now. Damn.

Thanks a lot for finding my fic and reading. Love your feedback.

el

[identity profile] neverdone39.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 07:15 am (UTC)(link)
I loved the chapter. Finally a little time to calm down. Benito greeting Ennis this way and Ennis blushing but cherishing it was so sweet.
Linden's thoughts were so funny and I bet he was listening to Ennis's and Jack's mouse-like love making.
"but their dicks are little" - and
"What? You think he's Superman?" Jack whispered. "Queer superhero hears homos suckin' face from forty feet."
Lol.
Such a feel-good chapter. Want more of it....

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 08:56 am (UTC)(link)
And Ennis didn't flinch at that homo comment. That's a step for him too. Seeing that someone like Linden is out is part of feeling good about themselves, despite the desperate situation they're in.

Glad you liked the mouse joke. I laughed out loud when I wrote it.

el

[identity profile] denim-girl2006.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 07:18 am (UTC)(link)
It was great seeing Benito again. Linden sure got through his "operation" well with his daydreaming. I got lots of laughs when Ennis, Jack & Linden were in the house together. The reference to mice was hilarious! I hope Linden stayed asleep or else he'll be very horny and envious. Poor man.

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-11-01 08:43 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks so much. Sorry it took me so long to get to this gracious feedback from you. I've had a busy week (not much time for writing, darn).

Benito deadened Linden's pain in the arm, but not in his heart. The poor guy needs somebody to love.

When I wrote the line about the mice, I didn't realize it'd be what most of you liked the most. I thought it was funny, but sometimes I have an odd sense of humor. Glad it was right on this time.

Thanks for reading,

el

[identity profile] ramona4jake.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 06:09 pm (UTC)(link)
A relaxing chapter - much needed ! I enjoyed it very much. I like very much Benito and Ennis "swore he'd never take a loved one fer granted ever again. He'd make damn sure the vet was in his life until one of 'em stopped breathin'." - wonderful !!
Oh, but also : "Fuck like mice " !! That was soo hilarious !!
Thank you !

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-11-01 08:44 am (UTC)(link)
Sorry this took so long to respond.

Ennis was referring to more than Benito. He'll never take anyone he loves for granted (I'll be there twice a year) again.

Thanks for reading! Love, el

[identity profile] casey28.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 08:02 pm (UTC)(link)
So many wonderful line had me smiling. And every time I read a chapter, I have the same wish; that this story will never end, or that there will be a sequel, because i love it so much!

And "we got to fuck like mice".... "But, their dicks are little"... LMAO!

Hope there'll be another chapter soon! :)

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-11-01 08:47 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks. Sorry my response took so long. I don't know how many more chapters this will take to wind it up, but I've got a bit more to go so you don't have to worry about it end too soon. I don't know if I'd write a sequel. I've got other ideas for plots I'm itching to get at but I don't want to stretch myself thin.

Thanks for reading, Casey.

el

I'm getting a feeling about Jorge!!

[identity profile] george66.livejournal.com 2007-10-30 09:49 pm (UTC)(link)
el_wing,

You open this chapter up so beautifully when Ennis embraced Benito. Its sooo good seeing our boy opening himself up to people around him who truly cares about him.

Darling the humor!! I just want to squeeze with delight. The humor is so real, honest and believable. Its springs so naturally from the characters and the situations they are in. This is remarkable when we can never forget that our boys are on the run from dangerous forces.

Linden - poor, adorable lamb. Want to brave in front of Ennis and yet wishes to ignore his crush on the guy. But wait! What is this? Who is this tall, strongly muscular man??? Mm-hmmm! The mind does wonder. (laughing)

Linden found some blankets and a pillow. After finishin' the dishes, they found Linden asleep on the couch with Nina curled up at his feet. Jack gave Ennis a wicked little smile, and they was off ta check the accommodations.

Jack had no problem climbin' the ladder to the loft.

"If we're gonna do this with him in the other room we gotta fuck like mice," Ennis whispered, behind em.

"But their dicks are little." Jack took Ennis' arm.

"I mean quiet like a mouse." They walked over to the bed. Was a small bedroom, but neat.

"Oh," Jack whispered, pullin' the quilt on the bed back. "I got ya. I was just kiddin'. Why you all serious?"

"Cause I'm always serious when I'm about ta fuck you silly," he said as he stripped off his jeans.

"Now yer makin' jokes."

Jack flung his clothes off and climbed under the covers, and Ennis followed. Jack planted a hot wet kiss on Ennis' mouth.

"Sh-h-h-h!" Ennis hissed.

"What? You think he's Superman?" Jack whispered. "Queer superhero hears homos suckin' face from forty feet."

"Shut up and suck my dick."

"Love ta."

Jack did. Kissed a trail all the way there. Made special lip-smackin' sounds just ta piss Ennis off, too.

"Think he can hear that?" Jack asked.

"He ain't gonna hear nothin' if you wrap that mouth around where it should be, friend."

Ennis groaned into his pillow as Jack did exactly what Ennis suggested.

Make him come so hard, he screamed into the pillow.

Now was Jack's turn.

Ennis took Jack down his throat. Never tasted anything like Jack Twist after a spaghetti dinner. Ennis reckoned it must have been that garlic toast.

He kept havin' ta whisper, "Shut up, Jack." Finally stopped and threw the damn pillow at him. Had ta stop and look at the man. Was all flushed. Loved that look of desperation in Jack's face.

"What?" Jack asked.

"Told ya ta be quiet like a mouse. If ya don't listen ta me, I ain't gonna let you come."

"I'll stuff the pillow in my mouth, just fuckin' do it."

Ennis went back down on him. Jack kicked and squirmed. Never had ta wonder if he was doin' right by him during love-makin'. Man was always so demonstrative. Could tell he was about to shoot because his legs got taunt and still like when yer gettin' ready ta pull the trigger. Then he went off-- thrashed around on the bed like holy hell. Loved that Jack Twist--

Best dessert he ever had.


I'm sorry but I just had to repost this!! Gorgeous!!

george


Re: I'm getting a feeling about Jorge!!

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-11-01 09:02 am (UTC)(link)
Hi, George. Sorry it took so long to get to responding to your feedback. I always love your comments and insights here and on other fics. I'm glad I started posting on David Cullen. It's fun and lively there. Never dull!

Writing fanfic is so different than writing a book. I always work hard to make the beginning of each chapter grab the reader and peek interest with the first lines. In regular fiction, that isn't necessary. Fanfic is challenging in that respect. I like to use relationships for the lead more and more after the fanfic has developed. I love Benito and readers like you do too. Visualizing Ennis and Benito like father and son worked well for this chapter because of that bond-- and we want Ennis to have a normal life. Love, friendship, a future. Benito gives this to both of the boys.

And Linden. After he gets over this infatuation (and Ennis learns to accept he's worthy of attention), he will be a friend too. As for Jorge, awwww. Now, hope I'm not giving too much away to hint that his frustrations may be coming to an end...

So glad you like the end. Always try to find a good clincher. The garlic bread was funny, so keeping with the "food" theme of dessert worked.

Thanks as always, george. Love ya,

el

[identity profile] schlopki.livejournal.com 2007-10-31 12:14 pm (UTC)(link)
YUMMY!!!!! *faints*

hot, oh so hot *rawr*

Jorge. Darker dreamy eyes. Yeah. Wait-- no-- don't look. Straight man! Straight man! Look down, no-- look up-no look down-- ah, fuck. Big muscle… I mean muscles. Not good-stop it. Don't look at the ass-- don't look at the ass. Oh god, he noticed, he noticed me checking his ass.

LMAO *aw* pool linden *giggles*

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-11-01 09:04 am (UTC)(link)
Well, yummy for the tummy to you too! I like writing Linden's inner dialog. It's a hoot. Sometimes I feel like I'm channeling that man.

Thanks for reading and commenting.

Love, and hearts back to you,

el

[identity profile] rosiet.livejournal.com 2007-11-01 01:54 pm (UTC)(link)
Sorry I'm so late! But I loved this chapter...Linden was so funny in the garage, thinking about Jorge's ass! And I loved this completely..

***"But I always had Jack. He's been my best friend fer twenty years." Ennis looked over at his best friend, his lover. Jack turned his head and smiled at Ennis. Was amazin'. Must a felt Ennis watchin' him-- or nosy bastard was listenin'. Sometimes the way Jack felt and heard things it was almost spooky. Him and those super sensitive ears. Damn he loved that nosy bastard.***

Awww...loved them making out on the couch after too, not to mention the ending...it's been nice this chapter for them to just relax...and who knows...maybe Linden will even get lucky with Jorge...( I hope he does, I like Linden! )


[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-11-01 09:47 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks, Rosiet. Love that Ennis. He's so sweet on Jack and it's nice to write what he thinks but finds so hard to articulate. And I hope Linden gets lucky with Jorge too. Hope he's "queer."

[identity profile] atz75.livejournal.com 2007-11-04 12:08 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks for the great update Bud! It's nice to have a chapter that's relatively quiet and not filled with immediate danger... they boys definitely deserved a break. And, I love that Jack's blindness now allows Ennis to hold Jack's hand in public without a second thought. It's a sweet silver-lining to Jack's condition.
:-)

[identity profile] el-wing.livejournal.com 2007-11-07 09:21 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks so much. Sorry it took so long before thanking you for your feedback. It's been a busy week.

Great that you picked out the hand holding. It is the one sweet silver-lining is that it allows Ennis to touch Jack in public without fear of ridicule. Thanks,

el

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